Here is one that I wrote that does not succeed well in having a sort of turn or revelation: rush of wind spring snakes through tree tops a river of air It has its kigo the word spring in the second line, in keeping with yesterday's post about kigo. But it's pretty one-note, sort of an "all of one piece" poem. The rush and snake terms both apply readily to water and air, the comparison is there pretty much all along. Mind you, I don't hate this haiku, but it doesn't have that sense of revelation I prefer.
Here is another take on this one: rush of wind-- spring snakes through tree tops devouring blossoms Now the wind has become a snake, eating the blossoms off the trees. Note that both "spring" and "blossom" are kigo. Further revision of the poem might replace spring with the name of the month, or dispense with it altogether. Nevertheless, I think this version works better for bringing something less-expected to the table.
Tags: fineman , forms , haiku , japanese forms , national poetry month , original poems. I follow. I may have to try one—no rhyming, just 14 total lines, regular haiku followed by the final 2 lines. Putting them together produces lots of variation—some fights but also some different winners each time.
You should try it out… and thanks for commenting! I have been working on similar structures and really like the idea of haiku sonnets. These are great. So pleased to find another haiku fiend! Thank you so much! I think it was William Carlos Williams who said that sonnets are an idea and not a form. I write more conventional sonnets too , but what I like about the haiku sonnet is its sparseness. Finite syllables allow more airiness in the poems.
In comparison, real sonnets seem so dense, deep meditations instead of fleeting awareness. I have written a different type of Haiku-Sonnet, also since I like your format as well, and will try it out. Fantastic, I myself have just begun exploring poetic forms.
Great to come across your blog. Pingback: Poems, Prompts and Plums — Verve. You are commenting using your WordPress. You are commenting using your Google account. American T anka: follows the same format, but it two lines longer: line one: 5 line two: 7 line three: 5 line four: 7 line five: 5. Japanese T anka: follows the same format, but it two lines longer: line one: 5 line two: 7 line three: 5 line four: 7 line five: 7.
Want more resources? Check out the Prompt Me Series on Amazon. Here are a few helpers: For rhymes, check out: RhymeZone. Yet, they could both be dated long back in time. Comparing Haiku and Sonnets could be applied as a way to analyze the difference in literary developments between the western and eastern world.
Haiku poems date from 9th century Japan to the present day. Haiku is more than a type of poem; it is a way of looking at the physical world and seeing something deeper. A sonnet is a form of poetry that originated in Europe, mainly Italy. A Shakespearean, or English, sonnet consists of 14 lines, each line containing ten syllables and written in iambic pentameter, in which a pattern of an unstressed syllable followed by a stressed syllable is repeated five times.
A haiku poem consists of three lines, with the first and last line having 5 moras, and the middle line having 7. A mora is a sound unit, much like a syllable, but is not identical to it.
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